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[Dream of my life]

As with the last piece I reviewed, I find this one to be really relaxing and comforting. It's early in the morning, and this fits along with exactly what I listen to whenever I have my coffee.

It's relaxing, it's calming, it's also quite beautiful. I really enjoy the melody in this track, as with the last one. I do feel you could've added a bit more of a bassline to this one. Also not too sure about the ending, it felt a bit pieced up like you didn't really know how to end it?

Other than that, lovely little piece.

gamejunkie responds:

Thanks SB, I'm glad your liking these. I just had a feeling you would! And again, this is a single acoustic guitar. Just very well pIayed and I will admit, not by me. This was played by a good friend who is not an NG'er and wish to remain nameless, but I have his full approval to submit this. And I agree the ending is a little slow/choppy in finishing, but it was fully intended to be like that.

Thanks again, glad you enjoyed.
Cheers gamejunkie

[Child in my arms]

Very relaxing, very comforting piece.

Big difference for me coming directly from your jams to this, when this is such a laidback, more quiet piece of guitar beauty. I really like the fact that there's a very soft bassline following the main melody that isn't even that easily noticed, it just fills in the track.

The melody is very charming, and very well written. You've really got an ear for this type of music. Would be nice to hear what kind of lyrics you wanted to add on top of it.

gamejunkie responds:

Thanks SB. I had a feeling you would like this one. And you wont believe this, but there is no bass backing, it's just one guitar, one very expensive, very very good quality acoustic guitar. One decent string pluck and it will sing for over a minute. How cool is that? And with this track we never intended for it to have lyrics, but if you can come up with something let me know and we will see what we can do about adding it. That applies to anyone reading this reply. And to any of my audio submissions. I would love to hear what you guys come up with.

Thanks for another awesome review,
Cheers gamejunkie.

[J@Ks Zoom Guitar Jam 2.1]

Nicely done! These are some really really cool riffs, I could definitely see this being turned into a proper song. This might be my favorite out of your jam uploads. Real flow to the guitar, apart from maybe a minor hiccup here and there, but that's nothing to pick on.

I'd love to hear a finished version of this. Currently the audio quality kind of ruins it a bit, and the static/noise isn't really that nice. Let me know if you finish this up with vocals, bass and solos!

Cheers
K

gamejunkie responds:

Thanks again SB. This is a track that will definitely be finished off. Just got to get everyone back together again. And that's not an easy thing to achieve, considering who these friends of mine are. But I will let you know when it's done.

Cheers gamejunkie.

[J@Ks Zoom Guitar Jam 2]

I guess I don't really need to mention that the volume is a bit low, but still, make sure it's better in future jams :)

Not a bad little jam, you've seem to pretty much got the flow of a jam going, but there is a bit too much noise, in my opinion, at least during the beginning. It's also a bit short. I'd like to hear longer jams from you :)

gamejunkie responds:

Thanks SB. Totally agree with everything you said. This was one of our earliest and probably the most tragic of all the sessions.

Cheers gamejunkie.

[Heartbrat]

I think it's a pretty good track, I really enjoyed it. It was relaxing all the way through, while still being pretty catchy. When the beat came in, especially. Think that might've been the highlight of this track for me.

Only thing I could ask for is just a tad more variation. Right now it feels more like you just add one something at certain intervals, which sounds a bit odd. I'd love to hear a more complete track with more variation throughout the entire piece.

Fudgehog7 responds:

Thanks for feedback.

[Viet]

That's cool.

Kind of wish I'd reviewed this before the weekend, could've gone well down at the afterparty.

Anyway, I think this one's really cool. I don't really know how this is related to Vietnam, if it were regarding the Vietnam war I'd expect a much more downbeat track and probably not of the electronic genre.

This track is more original than most else I'll find on here. These minor things really make it stand out, like random flute parts in the middle of it, well-done transitions and a melody that works out throughout the entire thing. To me this sounds professionally produced. I think the ending is a bit weird, with it speeding up before cutting off. It works out, I just felt like pointing out that it does seem somewhat odd.

Anyway, it's a great track and I wouldn't want to improve much on it. You do say there were vocals on top of it, and when I do listen it feels a bit empty, like it is missing something that the vocals would fill.

WizMystery responds:

Thanks for the review!

The assignment that this was made for was a Vietnam rap, but having never written hip hop I wanted to continue my attempt at making fidgety... anything. Also, I kept throwing out ideas and by the time I had a week left to finish it I just said "screw it" and decided to go with whatever. I wished it could have been more on the ball, and hopefully I can practice working with writing prompts that will teach me how to stay more on the task and focused.

Also, WELL-DONE TRANSITIONS? You have no idea how much I was dreading people remarking how piecemeal this was and how horrible the transitions were. I guess that's just me being paranoid. The speeding up thing was just to get an extra chorus in there (I called that a chorus. The shame...) that would have been too slow otherwise. I should have had a vocal-driven chorus which would actually make it a chorus...

I'll keep this in mind as I still have no clue what to think about this one.

[City Vibes]

Interesting track, but I have to agree with Haggard here, it really does lack some power.

My question is whether you went for an atmospheric feel with this or rather something with a nice beat that you can really nod your head to.

You've used some nice synths, and I really enjoy the bass in the piece, which is why I'd like to hear more focus on it. That said the melody is also absolutely amazing. I'm just having a hard time deciding whether this is a rather relaxing atmospheric track or more of a fun energetic track with a catchy beat.

Hikari responds:

It was supposed to be more of a atmospheric track. Thats why I hate the intro because it misconstrues the intention of the song. Im thinking of making the bass pattern more active in my remix.

[Not Enough {Dj-Abbic}]

In my opinion this just takes far too long before it really starts. Not having any bass at the beginning of a track isn't necessarily a bad thing, but the fact that for so long it seemed like it was only these two keys that went all by themselves it felt highly repetitive for the first two minutes and easily got boring.

Once the bass kicked in and the song really took shape, it immediately sounded a bit better. The nice little buildup wasn't bad at all. It even builds up further. I do think you could've varied up the keys a bit, and even atabout 4.15 or so when it again builds up, it doesn't feel like that much has changed. It sounds good, it just isn't anything new.

All in all the track feels very dragged out, with long segments and little variation overall. I do like the synths and especially the keyboard samples you used, but add some more variation, please.

DjAbbic responds:

I agree with most of what you have said. It IS quite dragged out with little variation and I really could have done better. I also made the patterns rather short, which meant the same thing would be looping for more times than a longer pattern.

Thanks a lot for the constructive review, hopefully I tend to these mistakes in future :)

[[LLM] Throne Of Poison]

Pretty interesting, if I may say so.

It does seem a bit random. The intro seems more menacing in the slow way, it's not in-your-face, not screaming at you, just setting a mood. When the track really kicks in it just seems really psychotic. It does sound a bit messy at times, and the main synth really could do some work, as it sometimes come through as nothing but a high-pitched mess.

You've got something pretty interesting going here though, but I feel you need to focus on either having this slower, menacing and dark track, or this psychotic in-your-face shits-hitting-the-fan track.

It also feels a bit ranodom as it goes on with this really odd bridge and transition. The ending sounds like a sped-up regular trance track. Again, the synth really ruins it for me. The outro is also really messy, and it feels like it somewhat reverts to that state it was in at the very beginning.

Cheers
K

Lich responds:

Hey Bro, thanks for the review.

Yeah, I'm even starting to think that a mixture between Dark and Psychotic isn't exactly the best of ideas :C My future releases though I will definitely take your word and try and keep everything cleaner and lower pitched :3

[Stuff]

Well, it's not terrible for the first track you've finished, but it definitely could do with some work.

First off, the volume is really really low for me. Crank that up a bit, so people don't have to turn their speakers up to max to hear what's going on.

The buildup is far too slow at the beginning IMO. It takes about a moment for the heavier synths to kick in. Even when they do, they seem a bit distorted.

The biggest issue I have with this track is that it's very very repetitive. There are some effects lain on top of it, but the fact is that it's very much the same all throughout with the same beats, same synths and fairly similar melodic line. The outro is also very dragged out, and it doesn't really feel like an ending to the song, it rather just drags out.

Experiment with using more layers, and especially experiment with the beats. They can do wonders. Variation is a must, don't force yourself to make a long track if you don't know what to put in it. A 2-minute track with variation is better than a 4-minute track that gets stale really fast.

Good luck
K

Rizy26 responds:

Thanks a lot for the feedback and sorry about the volume I didn't do great at mixing it and a lot of it kept getting messed up everytime I exported it so I had to take a lot of the levels down so it wouldn't worse than it already does.

As for the intro I wasn't sure what to do there tbh. At first I had a piano line but that didn't really work so I had to take it out. Ended up with a long intro of just drums and ended up thinking "meh its ok", just the product of my terrible laziness.

And a lot of the synths were really gotten by accident I was hoping to go for a Justice style distorted thing but I couldn't really get it to work. And thanks for the comment on variation I didn't know I was doing that, I guess I was just sticking to the one riff I was happy with.

Thanks a lot for the review, they only people who have properly commented on this are a couple of my friends so its nice to get an honest opinion and something that will actually help me.